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招生官告诉你留学文书该写什么 不该写什么

　　通常，同学们在写留学申请文书的时候会天南海北地胡侃一顿，写出的文章必然会石沉大海，失去竞争机会。下面，一诺留学小编为大家带来了一篇招生官所写的留学文书该写什么不该写什么的文章，希望同学们可以参考借鉴。

　　弗莱福德博士Dr. Friedfeld

　　招办工作经历：历任普林斯顿大学(Princeton)文理学院招生办副主任、康奈尔大学(Cornell)助理招办主任，统筹协调普林斯顿和康奈尔大学招生录取工作，Ivygate(藤门国际教育)波士顿办公室负责人。

　　教育背景：康奈尔大学科学学士学位、赖斯大学环境工程博士和哥伦比亚大学教育学硕士学位。

　　提到文书，你该写些什么?你又不该写什么?

　　你是不是刚刚跟约会的某人分手了?大学对这点事可不感兴趣。你在饭店当服务员的时候，把口水吐到了一个粗鲁的客人的食物里?首先，这种行为太恶劣，其次，也没必要告诉大学。在你心里，乔治华盛顿是不是最伟大的总统?可别选这么个话题。

　　看看上面的例子，为什么这些是潜在地不好的话题呢?

　　在你的申请文书里谈论男朋友和女朋友是一件很冒险的事情。招生官真能从你的感情生活里了解你本人吗? 不能吧，而且很可能让招生官对你的文书失去兴趣。

　　如果意在谈论道德行为，把你曾经在客户食物里吐痰，考试作弊或者偷过一个糖果棒的丑事抖搂出来或许对证明你的悔改之心是个很好的话题，但是，但是还是不建议絮叨这些事情。或许招生官正在拿你更另外一个为当地图书馆筹集了5000刀的申请者做比较，如果你写的是这样一个有问题的行为，那对不起了，这太容易决定谁去谁留了。

　　对招生官来说，讨论历史上着名人物的文书是非常无聊的。他们也上过高中，早已经知道他们了。再说了，招生官能从你描述乔治华盛顿，贝比鲁斯，居里夫人的字里行间知道你是怎样的人吗?几乎任何一个话题都有可能写出好的甚至特别出彩的文书。只是很多申请者们还没有这个本事。所有，选择一个好的话题是很关键的。

　　读到你的文书，招生官可能想知道你喜欢什么，不喜欢什么，你做了什么，你期望以后有什么成就。他们最想知道你在接下来的四年里能给他们的学校带来什么，你有兴趣参加什么活动，你是否是个潜在的领导者，你最想学什么。

　　最后，请牢记，你是想通过文书展现你讨人喜欢的一面。如果你抱怨你的男朋友，为你把口水吐到客人食物里狡辩，倾诉你对华盛顿仰慕之情的时候，你能讨人喜欢吗?估计不能吧!

　　但是，你喜欢那个教移民英语的人吗?你喜欢那个努力奋斗一年完成五千米长跑的人吗?你喜欢那个为受欺负的朋友出头的人吗?

　　是的，我们都喜欢这样的人。这些类似的事情是你在写文书的时候应该去想的-让招生官知道你是一个什么样的人，你的喜人之处在哪里。你不告诉他们，他们永远都不知道。

　　原文：

　　The college essay! What should you write about? More importantly, what should you not write about?

　　Did you just break up with someone you were dating? Colleges don’t want to know about it. Are you a waiter who spit in a rude customer’s food? First, that’s gross. Second, there’s no need to tell colleges about that either. Is George Washington the greatest president in your opinion?Please don’t choose this topic.

　　Take a look at the examples above. Why are these potentially bad topics?

　　There’s a risk when you talk about boyfriends and girlfriends in your college essay. Are admissions officers really learning a lot about you from your love life? Doubtful. And it could be a major turn-off.

　　When it comes to ethical behavior, it might be good for your conscience to come clean about expectorating (SAT word) in a customer’s food, or cheating on an exam, or stealing a candy bar – but it’s not recommended. Admissions officers might be choosing between you and an applicant who just raised $5,000 for the local library. Sorry, but this probably won’t be a very difficult choice if you write about questionable behavior.

　　Writing an essay on a famous historical figure can be pretty boring for admissions officers. They went to high school and have already learned about these same people. Can an admissions officer really know more about you because you chose to write about George Washington, or Babe Ruth, or Marie Curie?

　　It’s possible to write a good, or even great, essay on virtually any topic; it’s just that most college applicants do not yet have the skills to do so. So, picking a good topic is key.

　　When reading your essay, admissions officers might want to know what you like, what you don’t like, what you’ve done or what you hope to accomplish. They likely will want to know how you’ll contribute to their campus community for the next four years, what activities you’ll participate in, if you’ll become a leader and what you want to study.

　　Finally, keep in mind that you want to come across as likable in your essays. Does this happen if you complain about your boyfriend, defend why you spit in a customer’s food or bore on about your admiration for Washington?

　　Probably not.

　　But would you like someone who taught English to immigrants? Would you like someone who worked hard for a year to complete a 5K race? Would you like someone who stood up for a friend at school who was being bullied?

　　We would. That’s what you should think about when writing your essays – let admissions officers know who you are and what makes you likable. Because if you don’t tell them, they might not ever know.

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